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Proto Type
Posts : 101 Join date : 2009-12-08 Age : 30 Location : Bialystok, Poland, Europe, Earth
| Subject: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sat Dec 19, 2009 2:13 pm | |
| Jesse Victoria: I am here with new face at TBW FIelds of Glory;I'm here with Prototypecamera turns to Prototype Jesse Victoria: Earlier today You said me taht you want to say something... so what's that??Prototype: Hi Jess, hi evrybody... i am here to told to all of you people right there and mainly to our GM, Mr. Donald Dark,that i am ready to fight...i please... no, i demend for it... so please Donald, gimme a chance to proove myself. Jesse Victoria: So, you're here to please for a matchPrototype: Yes! Now i am ready...(Prototype starts to shout a little)come on!! Gimme some good opponent, Dark!!!behind Prototype suddenly appear DareDevilZ Jesse Victoria lookes strangePrototype:Whassup Victoria?!Jesse Victoria:Loo- loo-Prototype:What?!Jesse Victoria:LOOK BACK!!!Jesse runs away Prototype turns out and jumps back scared DareDevilZ: You want good opponent?? Here...you...GOOOO!!!Prototype steps back a bitPrototype: Wha- what??DareDevilZ:I...will...be...your...opponent... DareDevilZ walks away and push Prototype with his shoulder Prototype is standing still scared and looking at walking away DareDevilZ suddenly someone catches Prototype for his arm from his back Prototype jumps back scared Camera turns to that man; it's Mr. Donald DarkMr. Donald Dark: First of all, for You I am Mr. Dark not "Dark" or "Donald" and there's another thing; You want a match?? I will give You a match... now it's official; In tonight show DareDevilZ will face You; PrototypeCan be heard some evil laugh Mr. Donald Dark is afraid a bitMr Donald Dark:So... i-i will walk away nowPrototype: O-O.K... i will go with you...heh...is it good??
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Darthy 2 Smarty
Posts : 90 Join date : 2009-11-18 Age : 33 Location : Prague, Czech Republic, Europe
| Subject: Re: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sat Dec 19, 2009 4:30 pm | |
| you use too much the word "say" , try to swap some for tell or some other verbs, also it can be seen outta the rp that english isn't your mother tongue.. buy i guess we have VGMs to fix that (*evil laughter*)
also, Monsterio is our "RL" Gm, the kayfabe GM is Mr. Donald Dark, so you should adress him as the GM when writing an rp.
apart from that, it's ok, just remember to use the colors in the RP (look in the rp section for the sticky thread) | |
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Proto Type
Posts : 101 Join date : 2009-12-08 Age : 30 Location : Bialystok, Poland, Europe, Earth
| Subject: Re: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sat Dec 19, 2009 5:54 pm | |
| i know about the colors and italic and bold... i'll try to fix up with that "say" and i'll change the gm... one more question : do i have to ask Mr. Donald Dark for permission to put him in RP?? I already ask DareDevilZ and Monsterio but they aren't reply yet... so i will explain to Monsterio and i will ask Mr. DD if i have to... | |
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DareDevilZ
Posts : 6 Join date : 2009-12-19
| Subject: Re: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sat Dec 19, 2009 7:38 pm | |
| The RP is nice man. I can't wait to see the next show | |
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Darthy 2 Smarty
Posts : 90 Join date : 2009-11-18 Age : 33 Location : Prague, Czech Republic, Europe
| Subject: Re: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sat Dec 19, 2009 9:21 pm | |
| generaly, you don't have to ask him, well, he doesn't exist but it would be good to ask monsterio if you're going to use him for something very big, that could affect other RPs or the entire show (eg. beating him up, so he needs to go to the hospital or many other things, i guess that using my 3I's (that is intelligence, Intelligence and INTELLIGENCE should suffice ) | |
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Proto Type
Posts : 101 Join date : 2009-12-08 Age : 30 Location : Bialystok, Poland, Europe, Earth
| Subject: Re: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sat Dec 19, 2009 10:30 pm | |
| U'r 3 I's are really really... i don't have words to subscribe how am i admire your 3 I's... Now i am actually not "using" Monsterio in my RP so... there is no reason for asking him now... but i will remember this... and thanks for help | |
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Darthy 2 Smarty
Posts : 90 Join date : 2009-11-18 Age : 33 Location : Prague, Czech Republic, Europe
| Subject: Re: Tell me; if it's good??(UPDATE) Sun Dec 20, 2009 4:15 am | |
| i always wanted to be like Kurt Angle, but i don't have the integrity, neither the intensity so i adjusted that a little bit lol | |
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